思路點(diǎn)撥
本圖描述的場景是一副令人喜聞樂見的圖畫,圖畫中,一只可愛的小豬造型的儲蓄罐,正在接住自來水里滴下來的水滴,像存錢一樣,存儲水滴。實(shí)際上,它儲存的不是水,它儲存的是幸福。我們可以看出,人們有了節(jié)水意識。但是,從正在滴水的水龍頭看,還是有人忽略了節(jié)約用水這一問題。因此,本文可以這樣寫作:
第一段:描述圖畫;第二段:分析有些人浪費(fèi)水的心理,并闡述水資源的寶貴;第三段:建議措施。
思維拓展
實(shí)際上,積極正面的圖片寫作,和揭示負(fù)面現(xiàn)象的文章沒有什么本質(zhì)上的區(qū)別,只要我們筆鋒一轉(zhuǎn),就能把它繼續(xù)按照原來的套路寫。
本文也可以從低碳、環(huán)保的角度出發(fā)進(jìn)行寫作。
關(guān)于節(jié)約能源的話題,都可以按照這個行文思路和語言模式進(jìn)行展開。
高分范文
Water used to be mistaken to be an unlimited and renewable resource. Actually, water resource is very limited and precious. It is fortunate that now the public is starting to pay attention①。 Just as is depicted in the picture, just like saving money, the lovely and smiling piggy bank is collecting every drop of water falling from the water tap.
However, water shortage is still a serious problem threatening the existence and survival of the whole human being, and yet the phenomenon of wasting water can still easily be found anywhere in our daily life②。 For example, water taps are frequently left on by careless users. Someone even assumes that they have the right to waste water because they pay for it so that it has nothing to do with others. In fact, so precious is water that we cannot afford to waste it③。 Water resource is indispensable④ not only in our daily life but also in the industry and agriculture. And water is the wealth of the whole mankind, and it is hard to imagine what the world would be like⑤ when there is no more water.
Even though an increasing number of people have become aware of⑥ this emergency, further measures still need to be taken. On the macro level, the whole world should make a joint effort to fight against waste of water. On the micro level, publicizing activities, such as broadcasting wonderful ways on how to save water on TV and other media, should be conducted. To store water means to store happiness and only by saving water can we save a better life for our offspring.
佳作妙譯
水資源一度被誤認(rèn)為是一種無限的可再生資源,實(shí)際上,水資源是非常有限且寶貴的。有幸的是現(xiàn)在公眾開始關(guān)注這一問題了。如圖所示,一只可愛的快樂小豬存錢罐積攢著水龍頭里流出的每一滴水,就像存錢一樣。
然而,水資源短缺問題仍然威脅著全人類的生存和發(fā)展。浪費(fèi)水的現(xiàn)象在日常生活中仍然隨處可見。例如,經(jīng)常有粗心大意者忘記關(guān)水龍頭。更有甚者認(rèn)為自己繳了水費(fèi)就有權(quán)浪費(fèi),與他人無關(guān)。事實(shí)上,水資源不僅在生活中必不可少,在工農(nóng)業(yè)生產(chǎn)中也是不可或缺的。水資源是全人類共同的財(cái)富,很難想象當(dāng)沒有水的時候世界會是什么樣子。
雖然越來越多的人已經(jīng)認(rèn)識到了這種緊迫性,但是仍然要采取進(jìn)一步的措施。從宏觀層面上講,全世界應(yīng)該共同努力反對浪費(fèi)水。從微觀層面上講,要進(jìn)行廣泛的宣傳活動。比如在電視臺播出關(guān)于如何節(jié)水的節(jié)目。節(jié)約用水就是存儲幸福,只有節(jié)約用水才能為子孫后代存儲更好的生活。
名師點(diǎn)評
① It is fortunate that now the public is starting to pay attention: 來自于2005年閱讀真題,原句是這樣的:Fortunately, the White House is starting to pay attention.
歷年真題是一座巨大的寶庫,廣大考生一定要學(xué)會充分利用這寶貴的資源!
② 第二段開頭,用了一個轉(zhuǎn)折詞,也就是“起承轉(zhuǎn)合”中的所謂的“轉(zhuǎn)”,把這篇作文改造成了一篇社會問題型作文,也就是大家擅長寫的作文。
③ In fact, so precious is water that we cannot afford to waste it: 倒裝句,表語提前,句子倒裝。
倒裝句寫法:
第一步:寫正常原句:Water is so precious that we cannot afford to waste it.
第二步:表語precious提前。
第三步:主謂倒置,變成So precious is water that we cannot afford to waste it.
普通的so… that… 句型,也能被化腐朽為神奇,成為鉆石加分句型!
④ indispensable: 不可或缺的,替換important的一個很好的詞匯。
順便講一個英譯漢的技巧:大家可以看到,在譯文中,這句話被翻譯兩次:必不可少、不可或缺。
因?yàn)樵闹谐霈F(xiàn)了:not only… but also,所以這個單詞被拆開翻譯成了兩個近義詞,以使行文更加通順。
⑤ what the world would be like:注意賓語從句必須用陳述語序。
⑥ become aware of: 意識到。意思和用法都等同于be conscious of.后邊接詞語。
⑦ 非常重要:一般而言,歷年真題中談到的正面話題,或者人生哲理類的文章,有可能題目要求會變成:
Directions:
Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should
(1) describe the drawing briefly,
(2) explain its intended meaning, and then
(3) support your view with an example/examples.
也就是第三段并非發(fā)表個人評論(建議措施),而是舉例,這時候就需要我們?nèi)フ{(diào)整一下文章的敘述方法。
這種情況下,我們可以把結(jié)尾段調(diào)整為:
Examples of people‘s increasing awareness on saving water can easily be found anywhere in our life. On the macro level, the whole world is making a joint effort to fight against waste of water. On the micro level, publicizing activities, such as broadcasting wonderful ways on how to save water on TV and other media, can be seen nearly anywhere and every day. In short, to store water means to store happiness and only by saving water can we save a better life for our offspring.
這樣的話,結(jié)尾段就從建議措施,變成了論證文章的示例。
可見,隨機(jī)應(yīng)變,對寫好考研作文也很重要。